Hey everybody.
My name is Yaseen Ali and I've been here for a few years working on some scripts. When the quarantine hit, I managed to write my first high school/coming of age feature script Mistaken.
Logline: After the disappearance of his friend-turned-bully, a social outsider has to navigate high school and fight to clear his name from a narrowing list of suspects.
Hi, nice to meet you. I hope you don't mind if I comment on your logline: I think friend-turned-bully distracts. Why is he a suspect, apart from being a social outsider? Give us a little clue to make your logline standout from the rest.
Yaseen, interesting logline.
Yaseen, love the logline and sounds like a great story!
Hi Yaseen Ali, nice to meet you. Congratulations on finishing your feature! I like your logline but can't help from thinking it can be a little more specific in terms of the battle and why he is a suspect. Food for thought.