Hello, I want to share my logline and hopefully get some feedback. This is based on a true story about my dad, and I have been working on this for a while now. Thanks so much!
Logline:
Based on a true story about a young man from a small town, who joined the Navy during World War II and became part of the most daring capture in Naval history.
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Hi, Kathryn. How about: "Based on a true story, a young man from a small town joins the Navy during World War II and becomes part of the most daring capture in Naval history."
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Thanks! Much better flow!
You're welcome. It sounds like a very exciting story.
After reading your other post, maybe add "U-505 submarine" to your logline.
"Based on a true story, a young man from a small town joins the Navy during World War II and becomes part of the most daring capture in Naval history; the capture of a U-505 submarine."