Hi Everyone!
I know I haven't posted in a while. I hope all of you are doing well and having a great day!!! If you aren't too busy, I wanted to ask your advice on what I can change for my new screenplay Logline. Recently, I took part in the "30 minute script read with an executive". That experience was extremely helpful and inspiring!!! After speaking with the manager, they recommended for me to change the characters of the story, but still stay true to the original concept. The new Logline that I wrote is:
After losing his grandmother, a young man searches for her sister with Down Syndrome who was killed in Germany’s T4 Program. This revelation encourages him and his family to begin healing after generations of secrecy ("A Worthy Life").
I very much look forward to hearing anything that you guys think I should change. Thank you all so much for all of your encouragement and support!!! I am so thankful to be a part of the Stage 32 community. I don't know how helpful I would be, but if there is anything you guys need, I am always here. Thank you guys for everything!!!
-Matt Ross
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How's it going, Matthew Ross? I really like the logline. I only have two suggestions:
#1) Change "Germany’s T4 Program" to "Germany’s T4 Program during WW2." I would change it because "during WW2" lets people know the time period.
#2) Change "man" to his role or career. Is he a college student? A baker?
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Hey Maurice!!!!! I’m doing really well!!! How are you doing? Thank you so much for your feedback. I really appreciate it!! I will definitely make those changes. I hope you’re doing well and having a great day!!
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You're welcome, Matthew Ross. I'm doing fine. Working on a writing job and pitching projects.