Hello. Made this super short film as editing practice and a challenge to a no-budget short. All feedback welcome.
Your Stage : STORE BOUGHT KIN (Short Film) by Jessica Lea Hurt
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I like the film, Jessica Lea Hurt. You did a nice job telling an entertaining story in a short amount of time. I like how you put the script on screen with the film. The doll parts were creepy!
I only have one note. The opening scene says, “KEONDRA is in a store parking lot. PARIS is on the phone explaining that she had finally perfected temporary soul transfer.” You don’t have to explain in an action line what the characters will be talking about in dialogue. You could write something like “KEONDRA snatches a phone out her purse and dials her _______ (adjective) friend PARIS,” as the action line, then have them talk about Paris finally perfecting temporary soul transfer in dialogue.