Are there any writers on Stage 32 that like to write children's stories? If so. The Great Big Peanut Butter Mess is a short that I think could be made into a feature. The problem is I do not write children's stories and I have no more ideas other than what is already written.
The script is on my page to view. If you think you can write a feature for this I will give this to you, if you get it green lit, great. I will ask for nothing in return except maybe a name drop during some interviews.
GENRE: Comedy
LOGLINE:
A little girl awakens to find peanut butter in her hair creating a hair-raising experience as she listens to her neighbors on how to remove the peanut butter transforming her princess like hair into a store with too many products stuck in her hair she cannot remove.
SYNOPSIS:
In THE GREAT BIG PEANUT BUTTER MESS, eight-year-old LILY and her six-year-old brother DAMON’s rivalry takes a messy turn when Damon decides to sabotage Lily's perfect hair with peanut butter. Lily seeks help from three quirky neighbors, each offering unconventional peanut butter removal remedies involving jam, marshmallows, and bread. As her hair transforms into a food experiment, Lily turns the tables on Damon, concocting a surprise revenge plot of her own.
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Wish ya tha Best Tim Bragg
Hi, Tim Bragg. I wanted to let you know that I moved your post from the Anything Goes Lounge to the Your Stage Lounge. The Anything Goes Lounge is for general discussion. You could also post an ad on the Job Board (www.stage32.com/find-jobs). Let me know if you have any questions.
Also, The Great Big Peanut Butter Mess sounds interesting, but I think your logline needs some work. Here’s a logline template that might help:
“After/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (the main flaw that the main character has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the main character’s personality) _______ (the main character’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes).”
The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline: “A _______ (the main flaw that the main character has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the main character’s personality) _______ (the main character’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes) after/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion).”
And Christopher Lockhart has a great webinar on loglines. It’s called “How To Make Your Logline Attractive to A-List Actors, Producers, Directors, Managers, Agents, Financiers and Development Execs” (www.stage32.com/webinars/How-To-Make-Your-Logline-Attractive-to-A-List-A...).
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Maurice that is fine that you moved my post. I will post it on the job board. I am asking for nothing but to give it to anyone who has an idea how to make a feature with it.
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Thanks Mark, it's there for whoever wants it for free.
Easy there Maurice. My Script Consultant does good work. I am not changing and doing Christopher's webinar.