After losing his family to a deadly virus, a grief-stricken computer hacker seeks revenge on the tech corporation responsible for the outbreak, determined to dismantle their operations and save reality from their catastrophic experiments
Would love to work with a producer who would, cheers! I made this in my bedroom with a blue screen set up, imagine what we could do together!
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Well done Fitz W and you gotta check out the Writers´ Room!
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Thank you Mark, I was wondering if I should, and your advice means a lot. I will be taking a look. Cheers my friend, live long and prosper.
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Wow, Fitz W! Incredible job on the film!
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Thank you Maurice Vaughan I appreciate it, I'm a few scenes in and hoping to get it completed, I'm going to be using this site to maybe get funding. Self financing is roughhh.
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Sounds like the first half hour of The Matrix! (That’s okay.)
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Mike Boas Thank you, I appreciate it, definitely inspired by it. An honor to be compared to it :D
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You're welcome, Fitz W. I suggest checking out the Financing/Crowdfunding Lounge for advice on finding funds and resources (www.stage32.com/lounge/fundraising). I also suggest checking out the Financing Blogs (www.stage32.com/blog/tags/financing-85).
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This is great! I love your creativity. What's the Protagonist's threat? What does he have to do? He learns about a virus and a corporation that's taking over and a man comes and shows him another dimension, and that's super-cool, but what is his goal and why is it impossible? Without these there's no tension or suspense. Maybe I'm missing it, or maybe you didn't include it here. I'm sorry I'm not answering your question about financing. I am confident that without these essentials in your script, it won't get into the hands of a studio or producer and financing will be a moot point until these elements are present (including the logline).
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Patricia White Hey Patricia, I appreciate your time and reply. I'm kinda new at being active so I like learning the things I need to include so I thank you for letting me know.
The protagonist's threat is a corporation that has grown too powerful, releasing viruses to control government response, they've even developed interdimensional technology. He is one man who is a hacker and can't stop them alone until a strange man comes and tells him that he has powers and the same common enemy. Even with these abilities, it's still an uncertain outcome. The old man's relationship with the protagonist is even more surprising in this "not so multiverse" light hearted cosmic journey about family and overcoming obstacles.
I will learn to be better about the loglines and details, I've kinda been more of an editor and actor, so the writing world is something I shall learn. Cheers!
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Here’s a logline template that I use, Fitz W: “After/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (the main flaw that the main character has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the main character’s personality) _______ (the main character’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes).”
The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline: “A _______ (the main flaw that the main character has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the main character’s personality) _______ (the main character’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes) after/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion).”
And Christopher Lockhart has a great webinar on loglines. It’s called “How To Make Your Logline Attractive to A-List Actors, Producers, Directors, Managers, Agents, Financiers and Development Execs” (www.stage32.com/webinars/How-To-Make-Your-Logline-Attractive-to-A-List-A...).
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Fitz W. You're welcome for the feedback. Here's more. "The protagonist's threat is a corporation that has grown too powerful, releasing viruses to control government response, they've even developed interdimensional technology." This is not a threat, not to him anyways. Does he try to break into the facility to reach the 'mother ship' that houses another virus? Is it guarded and he's got no real experience with masterminding security? If they catch him, what will happen? That's a threat. It must be very specific to your protagonist. You also don't have a true plot, not yet. You have a genre - sci fi, but is this a rescue plot, trapped plot, revenge plot, etc.? Take a step back and spend some time reading an article about plots. Decide which one is yours and take another go at your logline. Interdimensional technology doesn't seem relevant to the here an now. I'd stick with the here and now. If the elements of the script are in the logline, IT WILL be attractive to producers. Be careful with the logline fill in the blanks. All your logline needs is: Main character, essential problem, why it's impossible to overcome it, and how its overcome. Ex: Here's my interpretation of Home Alone: When a YOUNG BOY (9) is left home alone, TWO THUGS decide to break into his home, and the Boy uses toys and makeshift security to fend them off.
The Boy's threat is that he is in danger - the Thugs will hurt him. It's impossible for him to fend them off because there's no adult to help him, and he cannot call the police (because he doesn't want any grownups knowing he's alone), so he uses a variety of household items - from marbles to an iron to ice - to protect himself and his home. The genre is comedy the plot is threat (I believe). Good luck and keep at it!