Logline:
In Wrong Cradle, two boys born on the same day are accidentally switched at birth, growing up in loving but mismatched families. Myles, a troubled but talented basketball player raised by an educated and strict family, struggles to find his place, while Chris, a brilliant and disciplined student raised by parents with a rough past, thrives beyond expectations. When fate reunites them on the same high school basketball team, their worlds collide, forcing both families to confront their deepest fears, their love for their children, and the unbreakable bonds that transcend blood.
Hi, Derrick Vernon. I’m a Stage 32 Lounge Moderator. I wanted to let you know I moved your post from the Screenwriting Lounge to the Your Stage Lounge because it’s promotion. Promotion can go in the Your Stage Lounge and on Your Wall.
You can put your promotion in one of the main Lounges (Screenwriting Lounge, Producing Lounge, Filmmaking/Directing Lounge, etc.) if your post starts a conversation that’s helpful or educational to the community.
You can also put your promotion in one of the main Lounges if you're asking for feedback.
Let me know if you have any questions.
Also, I think your logline needs to be shorter. It's 92 words. That's a short synopsis.
Here’s a logline template that might help: After/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (the main flaw that the protagonist has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality) _______ (the protagonist’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes).
The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline: A _______ (the main flaw that the protagonist has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality) _______ (the protagonist’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes) after/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion).
Loglines are one or two sentences. A one-sentence logline sounds better, and it takes less time for a producer, director, etc. to read it. Try to keep your logline to 35 words or less.
Sometimes I put the location and date that the story takes place in instead of the inciting incident if it’s a Period Piece script.
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Thanks Maurice I appreciate that. I'm trying so hard to get my script in a producers hand and seem like I can't get over these obstacles but can't quit. Thanks.
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You're welcome, Derrick Vernon. You got the right attitude. Here's some things that might help you find a producer for your script.
You could enter screenwriting contests that get your script in front of producers/etc., like Stage 32's contests (www.stage32.com/scriptservices/contests).
You could pitch your script to executives, managers, etc. through Stage 32's Pitch Sessions (www.stage32.com/scriptservices/pitch-sessions). The Pitch Sessions are mainly to get feedback on pitches, but members have gotten managers, signed shopping agreements, etc. through the sessions (www.stage32.com/scriptservices/success-stories).
You could network with producers/etc. on Stage 32 and find the right person for your script. Here are blogs on networking: www.stage32.com/blog/tags/networking-41
You could also search for industry professionals in the Browse Members section (www.stage32.com/people) and IMDbPro (https://pro.imdb.com/signup/index.html?rf=bing_brand_us_675823263_132711...).