Hello everyone!
I have the following idea for my first short film that I want to direct:
After years of loss, a young man has never quite put the pain of his beloved grandmother's death behind him. During a taxi ride through grey, deserted streets, he is accompanied by a strange boy and an eerie silence. When an elderly woman gets into the taxi, he realises to his astonishment that it is his grandmother - exactly as he knew her in his childhood.
What begins as a touching reunion takes a shocking turn when she confronts him with a shocking truth: she believes it is he who died years ago. In the midst of this surreal encounter, the boundaries between reality and memory blur until she disappears without a trace, leaving him with one question: Which side are we on?
I wanted to ask for feedback and help for this idea.
Thank you!
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What a twist, Matin Navadeh! I like the ending. The audience will be left asking "which side is he on?"
What kind of help are you looking for? A co-writer. If so, you could make a post on the Job Board for a co-writer (www.stage32.com/find-jobs).
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Thank you for your feedback Maurice Vaughan, it is a pleasure. Actualy I was just asking for some feedback by other screenwriters, but I will also think about looking for a co-writer.
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You're welcome, Matin Navadeh. Oh ok. There are a lot of talented screenwriters on here. And welcome to the community. Stage 32 had a live Community Open House the other week. You can watch the recording here (www.stage32.com/education/products/stage-32-community-open-house-webcast). It'll help you navigate Stage 32 and connect with creatives and industry pros.
Stage 32 also has a blog about navigating the platform and making connections: www.stage32.com/blog/how-to-successfully-navigate-the-stage-32-platform-...
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Thank you, I hope to meet a lot of passionate people like on my journey here
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I think you've got something there... and quite unique and intriguing. I like your idea!
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You're welcome, Matin Navadeh. Hope you meet a lot of passionate people and find success on Stage 32! I'm looking forward to seeing your film!
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Really looks great Matin Navadeh Movie Poster?
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Which side of what are we on?
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Mike Boas With the phrase „which side are we on?“ I want to question where we stand between life and death
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Mark Films I unfortunatly havent filmed it yet, but I will in the next months. So in the Future I will definitly need a movie poster
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Sylvia Melanson thank you a lot, for your Feedback
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Wow, that sounds like a fantastic story, Matin! I really think it has strong potential for a powerful film."
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Amit Kharb thank you a lot for your Feedback!
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What you have now is okay, but can you tell what's wrong with it?
A grandmother grieving man is unable to cope with her death, when she briefly appears in his taxi, pointing out that it is he who died.
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Awesome idea, low budget to shoot too.