Horst is a fifty-year-old virgin with autism who spends his time compulsively disinfecting germs and trying to get his neighbors to stop slamming doors. He longs to find love, but will all his rigid rules, drives everyone away. His friend Helen is a hoarder. The city is threatening to condemn her house. But Horst, whose superpower is cleaning, springs into action. With the help of their ragtag group of friends, they’ll have 30 days to clean her house and pass inspection. But Helen’s biggest challenge is her daughter, wild and outspoken Starrr, whose dreams of making it as a singer always get derailed by her drinking.
Screenwriting : What do you think of my new blurb for CRAZY PEOPLE? by Scott Evans
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One problem is that I find it hard to relate to the characters. So you should add some details which make the characters more emphatic.
You should also add details which suggest a happy end.
At the same time I suspect that this story may work better as a play than as film. So perhaps you should contact your local amateur theatre.
Thanks, Goran, for the feedback.
Nice that you like what I suggested. Good luck.
Keep the focus on Horst at the end.
"but will all his rigid rules, drives everyone away"
correct to: "but will all his rigid rules drive everyone away".
The blurb catches my interest for sure. I enjoy quirky main characters.
I have a much younger male virgin in the main role I'm currently working on.
Agree with Goran's comments, this story looks more like a play than a film