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Anton, with the ability to teleport, and Tanya, who is going through a divorce, meet in an elevator after an unsuccessful interview, where a verbal altercation takes place between them, escalating into an unexpected argument, but everything does not go as planned.
SYNOPSIS:
In the elevator of the business center, two people meet, whose destinies intersect at this moment.
Anton is a thin young man with the ability to teleport, and Tanya is an adult woman going through a difficult period after a recent divorce.
Both of them find themselves in an elevator after an unsuccessful interview and start a conversation that quickly escalates into swearing. They vent their emotions on each other related to a failed job interview and personal problems.
However, after this exchange of "pleasantries" they seem to find a common language. Tanya invites Anton to get off on the 27th floor and gives him a task. If he fulfills it, she will fulfill his wish.
Anton agrees and, using his teleportation ability, finds himself in an endless corridor, where he needs to kill his copy in order to open the door and make it to the first floor before Tanya's elevator doors open.
However, Anton dies, and Anton Two (a copy), having changed into his clothes, manages to open Tanya's elevator doors and makes a wish for her to have coffee with him.
They both leave, and the elevator doors close.
Darkness.
Anton finds himself on the psychologist's couch with his eyes closed.
Tanya's voice can be heard off-screen, explaining that at the count of three he should open his eyes.
Anton opens his eyes and takes a deep breath...
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An idea packed with potential: two people, limited space, teleportation. Poster says "Squabble" while the post says "Squabbling." Which is it?
Interview for a job they're both being considered for? Are they trapped? An elevator ride even from the top of a tall building is a short one. Otherwise, how does all this occur in this short time.
The logline mentions the verbal altercation and an "unexpected argument" but doesn't clearly indicate the stakes or the story's core conflict. These two ideas are essentially the same. Why is this elevator encounter significant?
"Everything does not go as planned" is vague and doesn't hint at what makes this story compelling or unique. What plan?
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