Hey there everyone :), I'm Bartłomiej Skuza (or Bart if it's easier), just a guy starting with screenwriting based in Poland.
I want to focus on showing different views on one of cultural aspects like Hollywod, but from average human's perspective. I recently completed the first script called: "Another Day in Hollywood". My goals are: finding a manager or representation, connecting with producers and directors, securing opportunities to sell or produce my screenplays.
The logline of my script: When an introverted official from Warsaw is declared a threat to Hollywood’s narrative order, he’s dragged into a neon-lit empire ruled by celebrity gods, where he has to outsmart an Empress, survive absurd trials, and confront his own self-hatred in order to release himself - if Hollywood doesn’t consume him first.
I'd like to learn, collaborate and build relationships within the screenwriting and filmmaking community. If my work resonates with you or you'd like to connect, I’d love to chat.
Bart
Hey, Bartłomiej Skuza. Another Day in Hollywood sounds interesting! I like the title!
Reach out to the Success Team at success@stage32.com. Geoff and his team can help you connect with reps, executives, and more.
I think your logline could be tightened up some. Here’s a logline template that might help: After/when ______ (the inciting incident/event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (the main flaw the protagonist has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality) _______ (the protagonist’s job/career/role) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes).
The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline: A _______ (the main flaw the protagonist has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality) _______ (the protagonist’s job/career/role) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes) after/when ______ (the inciting incident/event that sets the plot in motion).
Loglines are one or two sentences. A one-sentence logline sounds better, and it takes less time for a producer, director, etc. to read it. Try to keep your logline to 35 words or less. Long loglines can make producers, directors, etc. pass on a project.
Avoid using “must” in loglines. “Must” usually means the protagonist is forced to do whatever they need to do in the story instead of doing it willingly. You might need to use “must” in a logline though, like when the protagonist is forced by another character to do something. Using “must” to choose between two options is fine.
Names in loglines are usually for biopics, well-known stories, and franchises (like Mission: Impossible).
Sometimes I put the location and date that the story takes place in instead of the inciting incident if it’s a Period Piece script.
All stories don’t follow this logline template. Biopics, documentaries, and Experimental scripts might not follow the template. The series logline for a TV show can follow this template, but the pilot logline and episode loglines for the show might not.