Your Stage : Need help with logline by Ryu Reeves

Hi! I didn't understand what exactly the heroine does and how she earns a lot of money.

The second point is, how does she help clients? Third, what is the dramatic situation?

What is the main thing for the heroine - profit or help? Because according to the description, this is a project about a business success story. But the logline is about a volunteer.

Hi Ryu, feels as though you've described the first half of the story - unfulfilled woman finds her purpose and becomes very succesful - what next? What is her arc? How does her story end? Where is the conflict/drama? From what you've given we don't have answers to those basic questions. Good luck going forward.

I like the concept, Ryu Reeves! It sounds kinda like a female-driven HITCH.

Here’s a logline suggestion: Struggling to figure out what to do with her life, a woman who’s good at talking to people becomes a "professional conversation companion” for the elderly, lonely, and anyone in need of an ear while navigating love, fame, and self-discovery.

Ronnie Mackintosh sorry it has was like 3am and I was half-asleep writing this post LOL. River Callahan faces a deeply personal conflict: one of her clients, an estranged father named Henry, reveals he’s using her service as a last-ditch effort to process his regrets before ending his life. River, torn between her professional boundaries and moral responsibility, risks everything to connect with Henry on a human level, sharing her own struggles with guilt and failure. The story ends with Henry choosing to seek help, but the emotional toll forces River to question if she can continue the job. However, a heartfelt letter from Henry months later reminds her that even imperfect empathy can change lives. River hands the business over to someone she had mentored along the way in the show. She ends up getting married to a guy and has a kid. She rides off into the sunset to enjoy her new life as a wife and mom

There are many conflicts/drama I just didn't feel like writing 5000 words in this post to be honest lol there is a client's revenge arc where negative reviews affect her business going forward. There is a self-conflict of her own personal struggles to balance work/personal life. There are character conflicts between her and other characters. I'm just too lazy to write a 5000 word post explaining every aspect of the show in great detail or I'd be here for days lol

Arthur Charpentier Hmm, that's my bad I was half-asleep writing this post it was 3am way past my bedtime LOL also, it's a little hard to explain because the business is such a unique concept.

Think of like an escort right? You pay for a girlfriend experience. This is similar but instead of a girlfriend experience she simply just has conversations with people. She does things with them like go bowling, get coffee, etc. But it's heavily focused on having conversations with people who feel lonely for whatever reason.

She is more focused on help but does want to find a career she both enjoys and pays the bills. The business ends up accidentally becoming more successful than she thought when she goes viral from a video someone else made about her. A vlogger in her city ended up doing a story on her because one of the clients she helped had a son who was a Youtuber.

There are many dramatic situations and conflicts throughout the show.

River Callahan faces a deeply personal conflict: one of her clients, an estranged father named Henry, reveals he’s using her service as a last-ditch effort to process his regrets before ending his life. River, torn between her professional boundaries and moral responsibility, risks everything to connect with Henry on a human level, sharing her own struggles with guilt and failure. The story ends with Henry choosing to seek help, but the emotional toll forces River to question if she can continue the job. However, a heartfelt letter from Henry months later reminds her that even imperfect empathy can change lives. River hands the business over to someone she had mentored along the way in the show. She ends up getting married to a guy and has a kid. She rides off into the sunset to enjoy her new life as a wife and mom

There is a self-conflict of her own personal struggles to balance work/personal life. There are character conflicts between her and other characters.

It needs to be more concise.

Stephen Folker For sure. It's not finished yet this is just very early stages

Stephen Folker if you have ideas to make it more concise I would appreciate it!

Ryu Reeves

There is nothing unique about this business. the same thing is done by bloggers, streamers, webcam models and girls from onlyfans they tell their clients what they want to hear. from what you have written, it is clear to me that you want to put the heroine in a situation of choosing between money and love. at the same time, in business she manipulates clients, and in love the man manipulates the heroine.

I would suggest the following description of the plot: after escaping from a toxic relationship, the heroine creates a successful business, but falls in love with a guy with problems again. The heroine has to make a difficult decision whether love is worth the new suffering.

Arthur Charpentier that's a good point! I appreciate the feedback and to be fair it is still in very early stages of outline. It's definitely not something I was about to start writing. It's still a little baby! My process is I get the general overall idea of the story I want to tell and then work on the fine details. I was at the part where the overal general idea was there and I was trying to find a logline that matched the tone

I changed "all while" to "while" in my logline suggestion, Ryu Reeves, and I took out the dash. I think the logline has a better flow without the dash.

Maurice Vaughan thanks!

You're welcome, Ryu Reeves.

Ryu Reeves - Keep your logline simple and clear—just enough to spark interest in your film. Avoid trying to sound overly clever; focus on the core idea.

Stephen Folker thank you Stephen I appreciate you my dude!