Your Stage : 10 page, technically 11 page by John Mansell Jr

Sorry I meant for the post to read My first feature length, its 120 pages just dropped the first 11 pages to get a feel from everyone.

Your script has a fantastic first paragraph. I was visually excited. Then, the setup/story fell apart with VO and non-stop talking. Page after page of talking heads. I stopped reading at page 6.

Mm must take a look ..

Thanks for the feedback, I appreciate you all taking time to read it. It is great having a place like this to get honest feedback.