Screenwriting : Grand Son - Learning is powerful than Education by Srinivasa Peddi

I would advise keeping it simple but intriguing.

Thank you for the suggestion, Mimi — I appreciate it. I’ll refine the logline and keep it simpler and more intriguing in the next post. Thanks again for taking the time to share your feedback.

If you don’t mind, I’d really appreciate your honest opinion on this logline and the story. Thanks for taking the time to look at it — your feedback means a lot as I’m still learning my way around here. I’ve shortened the logline as you suggested.

I like the idea, @Srinivasa! What about this for a logline: After finding wisdom in his uneducated grandfather, a __________ (the main flaw he has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes his personality) boy raised in a family obsessed with prestige builds a restaurant empire, proving heart and learning can surpass titles and degrees.

I actually like the concept. Make sure to include the stakes.

Maurice Vaughan Thank you so much — that really means a lot coming from you.

I love the direction you suggested. In my version, the heart of the story is very much about that contrast: a boy shaped by a family obsessed with prestige, yet deeply moved by the simple, grounded wisdom of his grandfather. His journey is less about chasing titles and more about rediscovering what truly matters — and that’s what fuels his rise later in life.

I’m keeping a few elements close for now, but your framing definitely captures the emotional core I’m going for. Really appreciate your insight!

You're welcome, Srinivasa Peddi. I'm looking forward to watching this!

Mimi Ogbu Thank you so much — really appreciate that.

And yes, absolutely, the stakes are woven right into the boy’s journey. It’s not just about building something great; it’s about what he stands to lose if he follows the family’s path… and what he risks if he chooses his grandfather’s wisdom instead.

I’m keeping the deeper layers close for now, but the emotional and generational stakes are definitely the engine of this story.

Thanks again — your note really pushes the conversation forward.

Maurice Vaughan Thanks so much, Maurice — that means a lot. I’m still in the process of reaching out to the right contacts and production houses, and with a bit of luck (and your blessings!) I truly hope we’ll all get to see this on the big screen sooner rather than later.

And of course, if anyone here feels this story resonates or knows someone who might be interested in taking it further, I’d be grateful for any referrals or connections. Appreciate all the support — it really helps keep the momentum going.

You're welcome, Srinivasa Peddi. If I meet anyone who's looking for this kind of story, I'll let you know.

And it's Stage 32's November Write Club. It can help you reach a goal(s), it's a chance to connect with writers, directors, producers, etc., and you can get support for your goal and projects. Week 3's blog came out Monday. Today's the last day to do the challenges in the blog for a chance to win three prizes! www.stage32.com/blog/november-write-club-week-3-how-to-make-a-strong-fir...

Maurice Vaughan Thank you so much, Maurice — truly appreciate that.

And thanks for the heads-up about Stage 32’s November Write Club as well. It sounds like a great opportunity to learn, connect, and stay motivated. I’ll definitely check out the Week 3 blog and the challenges — always good to keep pushing forward.

Really grateful for the guidance and support!

You're welcome, Srinivasa Peddi. Great. I forgot to put this in my last comment. Reach out to the Success Team at success@stage32.com. Geoff and his team can help you connect with producers, executives, and more.

Thank you, Maurice Vaughan — really appreciate the tip. I’ll reach out to the Success Team.

You're welcome, Srinivasa Peddi. Have a great weekend!