Screenwriting : Holiday Dramady by Ilanna Mandel

Congratulations on finishing Act One, Ilanna Mandel!

Maybe you could help me out.

I just started writing a holiday screenplay myself, and would love to swap and give each other feedback if you're willing

If you're writing in acts, you already have an idea of where you want to go. If your deadline is late December, then it's not for this year so don't wait for other's opinions. Just write it out. With all the titles you have listed in your credits, you are more likely far more qualified to judge your own work. As a writer, you should know that you write for yourself and hope that you can build a fan base off of your inspired creative thoughts. Just go for it. On other sites for producers looking for screenplays, I only submit the first 10-30 pages for them to judge if they want to read the rest, but the work is finished. I think you're already on the right track, just remember that what you finish with should be something that audiences will want to revisit every year. A one and done viewing of a film is a failure. Make it memorable and make it part of a family tradition and you'll be fine.

I'll read it and let you know what I think. I do a good amount of this and the people whose works I read usually compliment my comments. Let me know if you want me to read it and I'll send my e-mail address where you can send it.

Looking for Management or Producing Partner – Original Sci-Fi Series: THE PHOENIX

Hello Stage 32 community!

I’m seeking representation or a producing partner for my original series THE PHOENIX, a

mythic sci-fi drama that explores humanity’s lost history and the legends written in our DNA.

Materials completed:

Pilot Script

50-Page Show Bible

Full Pitch Deck

Storyboards + Music Direction

Season One Draft (with arcs through Season Four)

The Phoenix is built for HBO-level storytelling — cinematic, character-driven, and deeply

mythological.

If you manage or produce genre content and love stories with scale, mystery, and heart, I’d love

to connect.

Ilanna: Send it to lenilevi@comcast.net

Lenny Levy hi Lenny, the safest protocol is to connect with people and then message them with your personal details.

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sorry this is all to new for me . I mite not have the ability to post very soon . so My mistakes wont be anyone's problem anymore . ( I'm just fighting for a reason not to give up like my body has

Jay have you considered entering the pilot in a content or setting up a pitch session with the professionals who connect here? I know they cost money but even one pitch session may tell you a lot. It sounds like your bible is a bit long perhaps? I always thought it was anywhere from 5-20 pages and no longer. I don't know if a producer has time to read fifty pages. Another thought is to consider making a short film as a calling card for your work. I'm on my second now and I'm just in the process of applying for funds. Might that be a possibility?

Key Sections in a Series Bible

Logline & Synopsis – A concise pitch of the show’s premise.

Tone & Style – Explains the mood, pacing, and influences.

Character Profiles – Detailed descriptions of main and supporting characters.

World/Setting – Especially important for genre shows.

Themes – Core ideas the show explores.

Episode Guide – Sample episodes or a season arc outline.

Future Seasons – Optional, but helpful for serialized shows.

this just shows how much I put into it I have a shorter 10 page bible . 4 seasons outlined . I have Character Profiles Logline & Synopsis Themes – Core ideas the show explores.

Tone Mythic Sci-Fi with Emotional Core

Your storytelling blends:

ancient mythology

cosmic history

advanced alien civilizations

conspiracy-level secrets

But beneath all that, your heart is in the relationships — especially Bennu & Nicole.

Your tone is epic, but huma

Themes . Awakening & Transformation

Bennu’s return

Nicole’s emotional rebirth

The truth about humanity

Your story is about characters waking up — physically, spiritually, and morally.

Awakening, identity, connection, freedom, hidden truth, trauma, healing, and humanity’s untapped potential.

GREAT WORK - As an academic I was a Social Anthropologist. I don't know your literary influences but someone like Ursula K. LeGuinn would be helpful to read as well as N K Jamisin

thanks being dyslexic this work has taken most my life . if you would like to see my show bible ( the short one ) Id be glad to share

the show the Phoenix story about what we as a people can be . in a way its also a roadmap to peace . at the end of 4 seasons the world becomes a part of the galactic community , but its a fight all the way .

I go over scripts on my YouTube channel and would love to take a look.

Let me know!

thank you Please