I'm working on the 2nd draft of my pitch presentation after a pitch session. One of my lower scores was "presentation and format". One thing I'm trying to figure out is how to weave in the "industry" stuff like logline, genre, and showcross. Is it okay to just say "the show's logline is ___, the genre is ___, and a show cross would be ____?" or should I be weaving it in, like making the logline the intro or something. My training is in acting, so I'm thinking about this like a monologue. Is that overthinking it?
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When I've done 5- minute pitches, the advice was always to include that stuff similarly to your sentence examples. The format would be to give a little bit about you and your perspective then land the logline seamlessly. So, "here's the dilemma/something I've observed/reason I want to tell a story and here's my solution/script TITLE is a GENRE about a LOGLINE" and then follow it with the comps. And I totally think you should think of it like a monologue. When I've been the person listening to pitches, the hardest ones to follow were the ones that were least story-like and sounded more like a bullet point list. Getting a flow in how your pitch/monologue builds is so helpful for keeping people engaged. But if you're struggling with that pivot from why you wrote a story to what the script's story is, I think it's okay to just list the logline, genre, comps, you just have to grab them that much harder when you start the script beats part.
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Emily J, thanks for the response! That helps.
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Hey Harry! That is a great question. I did a free webinar on pitching that you can find here. My hope is you can find some info there as well: https://www.stage32.com/webinars/Pitching-Tips-from-the-Pros-Your-Bluepr...
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The other thing you could do is join the Writers' Room pitch sessions on a Thursday and practice in there. The feedback I've had from Brooklynn and John has been invaluable and you can learn a lot listening to others pitch. My pitch has improved with each practice session so I recommend it!