Not sure if this will count as a logline, but looking to get an idea if this would even sound interesting before I continue writing the screenplay. "A loving, yet naive husband discovers his wife's adulterous actions and is unable to forgive or leave her."
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Been working on writing some screen plays and have two in 2nd draft status. I go over them and try and see if I made any mistakes but sometimes I feel like sometimes my dialogue might be the problem. I posted my scripts to Amazon Studios but you don't get much feedback there from the site or people...
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Marysia Trembecka
- 11 years ago
Yep I was one of the actors who did the readings for LSF, and having different directors was great - some re-edited a lot, others did not.
Vanessa Bailey
- 11 years ago
Yes, I was also one of the actors - not one of the writers! It was fascinating. the approaches were so different. Most of my directors did cut lots, though :)
Yes - once you hand it over to the director, it's not yours any more! \O/ It's a framework, basically. :D
Great quote, Tom, which director made, it?
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I agree that it needs something more. "Unable to forgive or leave her" suggests a static plot line. There must be something the husband does, or attempts to do, in order to resolve the conflict.
Maybe replace the ending with something like: "and is forced to..." (fill in the plot). Not those words exactly, but something with a "punch".
When a naive husband discovers his wife's affairs, he,,,,,
Maybe he can't leave her, but he can make her and the guy/woman she's cheating with pay. Why should he be the only one suffering? Maybe he hopes as he gets rid of the competition, she will turn back t...
Expand commentMaybe he can't leave her, but he can make her and the guy/woman she's cheating with pay. Why should he be the only one suffering? Maybe he hopes as he gets rid of the competition, she will turn back to him for love if he's still there. Of course, he couldn't let her know he knows or that he's the one getting rid of the other lover. Got to make it complicated.
Very nice! Maybe you could hint at why he can't forgive or leave her, such as he's religious or a pastor or whatever the reason. "A loving, yet naive pastor discovers…" Good luck!