Patrick Kropkowski's Lounge Discussions

What will you be using the reel for? If you're hoping that industry pros (agents, casting directors, etc) will be watching this, then you need to cut a version that is less than 2min long. I personally skipped past the first clip after about 15sec, looking for your next clip. A CD or agent won't even do that. They'll just stop watching. You don't need to tell a story with each clip. The goal shouldn't be to make me understand the project. Instead, I just need a glimpse of you playing a certain character, and then we should be on to the next clip. Also, try cutting out as much of the other actors in the scenes as possible. Don't worry if the result doesn't make a lot of sense. Again, you're not trying to showcase coherent scenes, just you. Hope that helps.

I think your strongest moment to start is at 1:09. I'd cut all that at the beginning and start with that very genuine expression at "What the hell does that mean". I'd even cut one of the sentences by the other guy, to shorten his time onscreen in your reel. Next, I'd cut to "Hello Mr. Fisher". Then, cut to 2:18 to 2:42, then 4:08 to 4:23.

Pretty good stuff there.

Thanks everyone for the comments/critiques so far. I am getting some awesome feedback!

Congratulation. Not bad. Performance and direction can be sharper, dialogue crispier.

Thanks! Any specific critiques you can offer?

On second viewing, its a decent effort by all. Maybe the story wasn’t compelling enough. I would have concentrated more on the tragic aspect of it. Am I even making sense? I just felt dialogue should be kept to its minimal unless written and delivered well, in order to stand out. But hey, you made it happen and its a big deal. Congrats again.