Sridip Duttagupta's Lounge Discussions

Hi Pranjal , congratulations for your success & awards. I'm a fellow screenwriter from Kolkata, West Bengal. Have written a few short film scripts & now dealing with my second web-series. However, also have a number of interesting stories that can be turned into features. I would like to work with you if have no issues :) Please intimate.

Best wishes.

Hello @Sridip. Thanks for the comment. Kindly send a private message. We will discuss the details in chat.

Hi Pranjal, sent you a message on 19th. Please check it out.

Hello Robert, welcome!

Thanks for you warm welcome!

Welcome.

Hi Aray, its a crime-action story with some dark humor. It's my first so will complete it before I will into other genres I like.

Hi Robert, sounds interesting. May work together if you want to.

Hi Robert. The logline may be- ' Two feuding brothers stranded in desert, have 24 hours to reach the Burning Man Festival to fulfil the last wishes of their father, failing which they will disinherit a lumpsum fortune'. How about that? I wish to add something more for you. I don't know the full story of your play 'Burning the Old Man'. But what about the following ideas you may include at your wishes in your movie? Here it is :- The feuding brothers stuck in the motel. The stake is- they will be disinherited great fortune if they doesn't able to reach Burning Man Festival in time. The condition is - if any of them reach the festival before the other one, he will solely inherit the fortune . If both reach there, both will inherit. To verify this, the family lawyer is already there in the fesival to decide who is going to get the fortune or not. In the motel, the brothers meet a middle-aged woman, who is also going for the festival carrying the ashes of her father. Actually, this woman is a thief, who generally thefts the passengers on the way to the festival. She doesn't have the ashes of her father either in the container she caries. She only holds some junks in it. She also have an old car which have only two seats, one for driver & one for passenger. One brother say 'X' immediately immitates to fall in love with the woman, wishing that he will reach the festival before his brother in the woman's car & inherit all solely. The other brother say 'Y' got furious with this & he swaps the containers of ashes of their father with that of woman's, wishing that even if 'X' reaches the festival before him, he will never inherit the fortune. Incidentally, both of them reach the festival at the same time, 'X' by the woman's car & 'Y' by hitch-hiking. Reaching the festival, it has been found that the woman is the Ex-wife of the family lawyer & the lawyer got furious seeing her as he knows that she is an imposter & also robbed him a long ago. As soon as 'X' introduces her as his 'Would-be-Wife', the lawyer tries to disinherit 'X' by hook or crook. ' What happens after this? Who got the fortune? ‘X’ or ‘Y’ ? Or both? How? It's up to the original playwriter how he wishes to end up his wonderful comedy. My best wishes Robert. Hoping to see an splendid comedy movie very soon.

So many great comments- thanks one and all- reworking and rewriting and all that- but have new logline. First off- this is really a dramedy (hate that word) - anyway, here is latest logline: While taking his father's ashes to Burning Man with his stoner younger brother, an uptight and severely depressed young man must face his greatest enemy: himself.

I love the new longline. Much better. The one thing I would change would be the cliche at the end. ... a severely depressed young man Meets his nemesis ... himself.

I like the concept a lot, Robert, but I'd like to know what stands in their way or what the consequences are if they don't get the ashes to the Burning Man festival in 24 hours.

Jalynn is right. The "or else" factor is missing. You need something like "Faced with disinheritance if they don't get their father's ashes to the Burning Man Festival within 24 hours, a young man and his stoner brother must navigate a nightmare of closed roads, car breakdowns, speed traps and crooked cops to reach their destination on time."