Cecelia Fresh's Lounge Discussions

Geoff Hall
Bad versus Good Dialogue

I found this on YT and whilst it is looking at fantasy writing for novels, all the examples shown are from film!

Well, if you can see past the sales pitch, I hope you get something from the video.

My takeaways were:

1. Dialogue is verbal action. (I like that)

2. Good dialogue doesn’t draw attention to i...

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Geoff Hall

Dan MaxXx indeed, Dan. Bad films do get made. Bad dialogue in films does get by a hundred eyes.

I was watching a programme on TV - FBI I think it was called. Dreadful dialogue.

Lead Agent - Lithuania?...

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Geoff Hall

John Clive Carter I think it was poorly defined, John. And yet helpful to know that on your nose, or maybe what we might call, ‘stating the obvious’ is just jarring to hear. Like you say, subtext is t...

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Geoff Hall

M LaVoie well said!

Cecelia Fresh

I believe it's Robert McKee who says, "Show don't tell." :) To support #2 in the above

Jenean McBrearty

For me, dialog makes or breaks the movie. If the actors have nothing worthwhile. or interesting, to say, what's the point of the action? You've seen one car chase, you've seen them all. The first Batm...

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Olivia Drake
Copying story?

Hey all, This is kind of a long shot. I’m aware there’s no such thing as a truly “original” story, but I just saw a commercial for a new TV series and they talked about a concept for a TV pilot I’m working on. It’s not identical to the TV series, there are major differences, but I’m worried that no...

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PolyD Flynt

Hey thanks Bill, I added your book to my shopping list for mid next year (Not allowed to buy anything before xmas or my birthday in feb)

Bill Albert

On the surface it might be similar to what you've got most likely the details are different. Don't give up on all you've put into it because there are similarities. Stick with your passion and go for it.

Molly Peck

Hi Olivia! Just wanted to add that whenever this happens to me I always think oh well, at least my ideas are on the right track with what execs want to see and what audiences are interested in.

GiGi Raines

Agree with Molly. No one can tell your story they way you tell it, and the industry like familiarity. Don't be discouraged. I always see it as I sign that there is an interest in what I'm doing, and learn from it.

PolyD Flynt

Agree with Gigi everybody is unique and if you find what makes you you and be honest and true to yourself, you can't really go wrong. authentic voices are more powerful than ideas that no one else is...

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Cecelia Fresh
Cecelia Fresh

I am a screenwriter. Just finished my first full-length, comedy/romance feature spec screenplay titled “Feeling Ophelia,” which I just entered into a contest with Gidden Media that I read about on Stage32. I’m already working on a new piece with a writing partner that will be a drama thriller series...

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Susan Joyce

Exciting! Good luck with the contest.

Cecelia Fresh

Thanks Vincent, your romcoms look awesome! Best wishes to you as well. Thanks, Susan!!

Robert Sacchi

Good luck with the Gidden Media contest. Keep us posted.

Cecelia Fresh

Thanks, Robert! I most definitely will.

Steve Lattery
Dennis the Office Cobra

First episode of our web series. It will only take a minute of your time. Tell your friends! Thanks http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YuKisa6QDOY

Peter Yamazaki Hetzel

clever idea that becomes predictable. Had some real comedic tension there until the cobra acts like a cobra. Turn the cobra into an enlightened guru and you'll have more material than one bite.

Mark E Clason

Let me know if you could use a versatile VO actor ...

Lance Ness

Interesting. Funny

Kris Keppeler

Hilarious!

Robert Sacchi

Expected but still a surprise when executed. Well done.

Cecelia Fresh
Budding screenwriter

Hi there, Wanted to introduce myself as a budding screenwriter to this new community I've joined. I'm looking forward to connecting and networking with the members of this community. A little about me...I'm a PR consultant, and budding screenwriter, and founder of myself. The most recent piece of my...

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Jaclyn Abergas

Hi Cecelia, welcome to stage32! This is the perfect place to connect with other screenwriters all over the world.

Cecelia Fresh

Hi Jaclyn, thank you! Glad to hear from you, and yes, I am hoping that I connect with all sorts of folks in the screenwriting "trenches." :)

Richard "RB" Botto

Hey Cecelia, just wanted to extend a hello as well...I'm not only one of the co-owners of the joint, I'm also a screenwriter. The community of screenwriters on this site is pretty incredible. Talented, helpful, friendly...Just a pleasure to be around.

Cecelia Fresh

HI Richard, thanks for stopping by to say hello :) Good to know more about you. I'm glad I found out about the site, and now it's even more encouraging to know that you, too, are a screenwriter! I'm b...

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Richard "RB" Botto

Thanks, Cecelia...As I like to say, I'm not only the CEO, I'm a member!

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