Good afternoon, everyone!
I am seeking proofreaders for my screenplay Good Morning, Mr. Kay. The screenplay is on the Blacklist, Script Mother, and I can also send PDFs for anyone that would like to read it.
It is currently undergoing it's first peer editing round, and if anyone would like to help, th...
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Hello! My name is E.M.P., and I am a developing screenwriter. I am a published author, and I am very involved in the visual arts. I am currently in the editing process for my first screenplay, Good Morning, Mr. Kay, and I am very excited to share my stories!
My screenplays focus on the dynamic relati...
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Good to meet you, Emily Phillips, and welcome to the community! Wow, congratulations on your successful writing career so far, that's awesome! I see you do concept art as well - did you do the one abo...
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Karen "Kay" Ross Yes, I did make my concept art! And thank you so much for the welcome :) I will be sure to check out your post later tonight!
Hi! My name is Heather and my dream is to be a screenwriter, director, and actress! I've been looking for opportunities to meet other people in the industry and be able to act as background characters and be an assistant to directors and editors to get a feel for how it works. I'm excited to learn n...
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Welcome Heather!!! I too am a baby filmmaker lol :) Very happy you are here!
Nice to meet you, Heather Marine.
Lainey, after being saved from her kidnappers by The Moving Sky, must team up with the strange organism to safely make it home.
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Sarah Hickory and two other humans are chosen by a team of strange alien creatures to save their dying dimension of White Space, a powerful realm that many otherwordly beings desire to conquer.
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Mr. Kay, a forlorn surgeon with a strong passion for the arts, finds comfort in an unusual therapist named Eve, a strange creature that lives in the dying interdimensional realm of White Space.
Divyam Jha Thank you so much for the read! What specific elements /scenes would you recommend I make edits to to make the plot better? Do you recommend spreading the flashforwards out? Is that what you mean by "infusing"?
Divyam Jha Or do you mean I should add all the flashforwards to the ending? :)
Yeah, I was emphasising on the second one. The use of flash forwards should be minimised in my opinion and the screenplay should stick to the linear style except the flashbacks, especially of that Russian boy, through whom, the back story of the White Space is being revealed.
And, you can add some more foreshadowing about the "pordoga" (sorry if I mispelled it) to make it thrilling. And you can add a few scenes revealing how the existence of Creature Blu, Pordoga and Igris balances White Space. The screenplay feels like it has just begun, and feels like the pilot episode of a 4-part web series. It's difficult for me to imagine many parts of the screenplay, and even how White Space actually is - white/transparent. However, visual possibilities are scattered largely across the whole script. It's the world you created, so you hold its sovereignty. And I have no right to lead it, it's only you.
And I suggest you to give a thought to turning the whole of "THE BLU AGE" into a web series after making some changes wherever and however you feel right. That's it.
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Divyam Jha Ay, thank you! :) I do have it up on Stage 32 now!
Oh, okay. I will check it out then.