THE STAGE 32 LOGLINES

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ZACH
By Becky Revak

GENRE: Adventure, Family
LOGLINE:

A scheming tween boy wants his parents back together and he only has one week before his Mom leaves on a train trip with her new boyfriend to prove that his workaholic Dad is still their superhero.

David Chester

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David Chester

This is the sweetest thing I've seen in eons. But I would consider a few changes. I don't think "ignites" can be used with "plan." Also, I think the boy would need to show that not only is his father the only "superman" his mom will ever need, but that his Mom is the only queen/princess/superwoman his dad will ever need. I think it has to work both ways.

The concept seems very sweet, but I think the logline needs to be more riveting. Good luck with it!

Becky Revak

Thank you for your comment! I will keep working on it.

Tasha Lewis

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