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By Robert J. Butler
A novel editor receives an email with specific instructions to save a life in 24hrs but realizes it was addressed to the wrong person.
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John Rich gets a coffee every day at the same coffee house. He hardly notices anyone as he is deep in thought editing thriller novels. One day an email shows up in his inbox with an important flag. Normally John does not open spam, but this email had the subject “Instructions for Saving a Life in 24hrs” but the email was not addressed to him.
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in my opinion, there is no theme for the movie in this logline. the hero can report to the police and do nothing. The described situation is certainly interesting, but I think you should change the logline. Because the logline declares that the hero only understands something. And what does the hero do?
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Arthur Charpentier I thought about that. My original theme (if you buy into the 10 themes movies fall) is Love or specifically obsession. The email was purposely addressed to the wrong person but it was intentionally sent to the right person. Show I add something like -- ... "to the wrong person unknowingly sent by an obsessed admirer."
A novel editor receives an email with specific instructions to save a life in 24hrs but realizes it was addressed to the wrong person and unknowingly sent by an obsessed admirer.
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Robert J. Butler, Unfortunately, I can't recommend anything. You have an interesting plot, but there are no hero actions.
A literary editor mistakenly receives a letter from a kidnapper and plunges into a clever stalker trap, hoping to make his investigation part of a new novel.
This is an example of the hero's actions, not your logline. The logline should not contain the word "understands", the hero must act.
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B A Mason I understand -- I'll play with revisions.