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"Dave" and "Home Alone" meet the "The Goonies" when the First Gentleman of the United States must work with a gang of school kids to foil a group of terrorist who've taken them hostage (108 pages).
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The Reluctant First Gentleman tells the story of Gilbert Conner, a teacher in his fifties whose life changes abruptly when his wife, Elizabeth, becomes the President of the United States. But he wants nothing to do with it. He's a simple man, a man that enjoys teaching carpentry at an ancient prep school. As Gilbert struggles to escape the spotlight, he finds himself caught amid a terrorist attack with potentially immense consequences at his school. Trying to find ways to defuse their bomb before it’s too late, Gilbert teams up with the gang of school kids who know every tiny detail and hidden passage in the school. As the President's only hope lies in her husband, that's hesitant over their future as a couple, Gilbert and the kids manage to go against all odds and save the world.
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This sounds like it's going to be funny, Curt Samlaska. I thought about "Kindergarten Cop" after I read the logline.
I suggest removing ""Dave" and "Home Alone" meet the "The Goonies"" and putting it in the synopsis section.
I think your logline needs a little work. Here's a logline suggestion: "The First Gentleman of the United States reluctantly works with a gang of school kids to defuse a bomb after terrorists take them hostage."
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