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RESCUE AT DISNEY WORLD
By Kevin Hager
A former soldier must save the day at Disney World.
SYNOPSIS:
RESCUE AT DISNEY WORLD
Max Brian is a former soldier who returns home and agrees to join his family on a trip to Disney World. Meanwhile a gang of militia terrorist led by Lorne Sutler take over the park through the owner’s office and demand to extort millions from Disney.
Max is drawn into the fight when his niece Sara ends up witnessing a murder and is kidnapped with Max’s ex-girlfriend Genie Shaw in tow and brought to the other owners. Max is able to alert security, and they join forces with the authorities to stop the gang. The police are joined by the FBI and reveal the identity of Sutler and what he is after. Max also finds out some of Sutler’s gang have infiltrated the park by impersonating tourist or employees and finds a way to identify them. Meanwhile Sutler finds out who Max is and learns of his connection to Sara and Genie.
Sutler attempts to kill them, but Max manages to break into the owner's office and prevent their deaths, Genie saves Sara and is kidnapped one of the CEO’s looks after her while Max goes after Sutler and Genie and saves Genie and engages Sutler in a fight that ends with his death.
The Disney company rewards Max for his actions and he gets back together with and marries Genie.
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If I may share some advice on the logline... it's too generic, too skimpy. In fact, it seems identical to your other script ("Mall of America") but with the location swapped out. You want to add a little detail in this logline. For example, what's happening at Disney World that involves the soldier? Have terrorists taken over? Zombies? Has Disney raised ticket prices so much that guests revolt? Does Ron DeSantis storm the park to kill the mascots? Does the Pirates of the Caribbean ride finally break down and start eating the tourists?
You don't provide vital information that could give one a fuller picture of what your movie is about. So, there's little intrigue here. On a practical side, only Disney could make this movie, because the protective Disney company isn't going to risk its brand by allowing anyone else to film there. And this is not the kind of movie Disney would greenlight. Its unlikely that any rep or producer would even get involved with this project because there's no market for it. One might want to read it as a "sample' of your writing ability, but, IMO, the logline is so drab that I can't imagine anyone taking the time when there's so much out there to choose from. In the end, the advice you'll get is to change the theme park to one that you create rather than one that actually exists. Good luck!
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