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WAR FOR ATONEMENT
By Kevin Hager

GENRE: Action
LOGLINE:

A criminal on release ends up in a Die Hard Scenario and must save his sister and others from criminals. 

SYNOPSIS:

WAR FOR ATTONEMENT

Aaron Massin is a young launderer who worked in laundering money for the street gangs and smuggled for them only to be in trouble on a gun selling charge and doing time when he is allowed a leave for his mother and stays with his sister Sadie at her job at a High-Rise tower. Then while freshening up the building is taken over by criminals working for career criminal Clifton Dacy who seeks to rob the vault. Aaron manages to escape and despite a chance to slip out he stays and alerts the authorities who send a Black and white named Officer James Sullen and after Aaron throws down a criminal he killed while contacting them he calls in backup.

Aaron and Sullen soon recognize each other as the officer who arrested him, but they work together. Aaron manages to hold his own even stealing bombs Dacy plans to use. Aaron and James have an argument where Aaron admits it was to help his family, and after calling James a racist James is forced to reveal that his daughter was killed in a gang war between two gangs Aaron is associated with. Aaron realizes that he helped the gangs acquire those guns and may have attributed to the death of James’s daughter and finally realizes his actions have consequences.

Aaron learns Dacy started in laundering dirty money for gangs and took over many of their operations, and realizes he plans to blow up the building to cover his escape. After killing Dacy’s lieutenant Stocker, he finds a way for the SWAT team to enter and take out the remaining criminals. While Aaron goes to confront Dacy, who kidnapped Sadie learning who she is, and another co-worker named Lena to whom he got attracted. Aaron manages to kill Dacy and saves Sadie and Lena, redeeming himself and now on good terms with the police and when Stocker tries to kill them James kills him. After the ordeal Aaron is pardoned and decides to live an honest life with Lena.

Jason Mirch

Good start - but what if I have never seen "Die Hard"? I won't get the reference. Is there another way you can explain that to someone without using another film as reference? (For the record, of course I have seen "Die Hard')

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Matthew Kelcourse

Hi Kevin Hager - I'll be the devil's advocate here. To me, the logline(s) you have posted read more like ideas for a screenplay than a logline. Perhaps that is your intent? Write on!

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