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One soul is on his way to heaven and meets a new soul who is scared to go into existence and helps the other soul to go, soon the two souls meet up and sit in heaven's waiting room and exchange their expenses after living a full life.
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A spirit was traveling heaven-bound. He followed other souls into heaven and on his course and saw new spirits going along a separate part of the path. ‘ My, what miraculous things they will experience when they’re in existence!’ the Old soul thought. He continued on when he discovered a lonely spirit that looked hesitant while the others wanted to get there quicker. Then Old spoke from the wall. ‘ Hello young one, why are you so afraid to be born?’ said Old. Surprised, the other spirit glanced up and responded, ‘ I’m scared. It looks intimidating and I don’t know what could happen to me.’ the spirit said. Old peered at the spirit ‘It’ll take time to learn things. While you’re alive, you will experience wondrous things.’ Old said ‘ Oh… Okay.’ The soul said, and he went along, and the angel came to Old and thanked him. ‘ Sometimes a soul is reluctant to go into existence.’ said the Angle to Old.‘ No trouble. One just needed words of encouragement to get moving.’ Old said to the angle.They waved to each other as they walked. It wasn’t long before that Old was in the vast waiting room for spirits with angels guiding them around and answering questions at one of heaven’s service counters. Old was in the awaiting section and sat with a numbered ticket the help counter angel gave him. They filled the space with other spirits with tickets in hand. A number on screen in a corner, the chime toned, the number called, and a spirit walked to a waiting angel by the entrance. Only a dozen souls were in the section when it began. Another soul sat by old. A bit afterward, there was something about the person that nagged at him. He remembered everyone in his past life, but none fit the one who remained by him and that’s when old spoke. ‘ Have I seen you somewhere?’ Old said. ‘ I couldn’t say that I have till now.’ replied the soul ‘I haven’t met many since I arrived here.’ ‘ Same here.’ the other soul spoke. A bit later, old Soul spoke again. ‘ I met a new soul that was reluctant to move into existence. I hope that little soul lived a good life on earth.’ On hearing Old Soul, the soul stared at him, and he remembered Old Soul. ‘ So it was you?’ Old Soul’s eyes widened, and he turned to New Soul. ‘ So… How was life for you, my young friend?’ said Old soul ‘ well, where do I start?’ a bit of time had passed before he spoke. I saw amazing things, grand things, vast things, good things, dreadful things, horrible things, terrible things, wonderful things, weird things, awful things. Felt soft things, hard things, smooth things, rough things, hot things, icy things, gross things, I’ve sniffed pleasant things, good things, wonderful things, awful things, terrible things, gross things, disgusting things, unpleasant things. I’ve tasted good things, great things, amazing things, sweet things, sour things, bitter things, bad things, gross things, awful things, I’ve Heard good things, great things, amazing things, fabulous things, weird things, bad things, terrible things, unpleasant things, horrible things, terrible things, awful things.’ New Soul said to old Soul, ‘ Do you think I can live again?’ Tears well up in Old Souls’ eyes as he looks at New Soul, knowing full well that this soul had lived a full and wonderful life and just as Old Soul was about to say something to New Soul. Old soul's number is called and Old starts panics, looking back and forth between New Soul and the angel that called his number. ‘ It’s ok, you go on and maybe I’ll see you around in haven.’ New Soul said to Old, Old Soul looked at new ‘ You go on ahead, and I’ll catch up to you.’ Old Soul had tears going down his cheeks, got up from his seat, ‘ I’ll be waiting for you on the other side.’ said Old Soul as he was walking away ‘ Yeah, see you soon.’ New Soul returned. Old Soul walked with the angel to a room and was told that he would go to heaven dew to his deeds and actions and would be a low level spirit, of which Old Soul was fine with that, and he was led to a corridor and was told to go all the way through. And he did and soon found that he was walking on grass and there were trees around him; so he walked to a tree and sat under it. Just was like what he did in the younger years of his life when he was alive, with the warmth of the sun on him and a cool breeze blowing with the sound of the leaves rustling. Old Soul sat there waiting and, at a time, a soul would walk through and then a group would walk through. This happens from time to time. It wasn’t long till Old Soul closed his eyes and was thinking about his life and remembering all the things he did till he heard ‘Hello!’ It startled the old soul, and he looked up to see the new soul standing next to him and the old soul jumped up from where he sat. ‘ You made it here, my friend.’ ‘ That I did, but it took some time thou.’ said new Soul ‘ Well then, shall we go for a walk?’ ‘ Yes, let’s do that.’ so Old and New walk around heaven sharing what they did when they were alive and enjoying the amazing things of heaven.
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Nice title, but not a logline.
Will work on that.
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OKAY YOU HAD ME AT FIRST FEW LINES!! THIS Is my type of SHOW... and really many are LOOKING FOR... just watch NEXT LEVEL SOUL Podcast - HOST ALEX FERRARI (filmmaker friend of RB)... to witness the massive amount of PEOPLE right NOW at this MOMENT IN TIME... moving towards THESE kinds of films!! I'm ON BOARD.
I too am learning so PERFECT FIT! JUST reading your STORY LINES HERE IS ENOUGH FOR ME... but of course, those who have gone before understand FAR MORE of needed outlines of HOW THE FILMS ARE CURRENTLY accepted in FORMAT.
CANNOT wait to see what happens with THE TWO SOULS... but I FEEL intuitively there is another name you might come to?? OR JUST one more work added to THIS TITLE you already have....
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This is very nice, It has a lot of potential!
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Should it be experience instead of their expenses!