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A man files for divorce after discovering his life-long wife is involved in something illicit, which leads him to doubt his own moral convictions of what is right and wrong, real and unreal, since he no longer knows the woman married to him for over a decade.
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Hello, Carmen. It's a very interesting concept. Just a suggestion for the logline, 'When a man files for divorce after discovering his life-long wife is involved in something illicit, he’s led to doubt his own convictions of what is right and wrong, real and unreal, for he no longer knows the woman married to him for over a decade.'
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Thank you, Mark. Great suggestion!
Writing my ideas is not an easy task for me, since English is not my first language.
Even though I like your suggestion, I’m not sure it’s what I want to show with my story…
This man is having a conflict with his own moral values. Also, he’s going to discover he’s perhaps emotional unstable… perhaps… haha and that’s why he’s perhaps confusing what’s real and unreal… real and unreal here means kinda like having hallucinations… he’s judging his wife with his morals, but perhaps he could be the one “illicit… I want the duality of the situation telling the story in the perspective of someone watching their lives and I’m gonna write this script backwards lol only in the end there will be explanations for everything!
Understand what I mean? I’m not sure how to write the logline without giving away the full story which is totally unusual haha
Hi Matthew, any ideas on how to improve?
Much appreciated.
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