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TWO FATES
By Lori Lee Peters

GENRE: Historical, Drama
LOGLINE: While former Marine Intelligence Sergeant turned Cadillac dealer helps the FBI stop a powerful Mafia figure, his teenage daughter is persuaded of her imminent demise.

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TWO FATES Screenplay written by Kelsey Ann Wacker Feature rated PG-13 True Psychological Drama 1970's quaint California town of Lodi LadyBird meets The Infiltrator While former Marine Intelligence Sergeant turned Cadillac dealer helps the FBI stop a powerful Mafia figure, his teenage daughter is persuaded of her imminent demise. Lou Peters became the first civilian Mafia Informant in U.S. history at age forty-five, told through the eyes of Lou's teenage daughter Lori, who share a deeply-rooted connection. In 1977 Lou's success caught the attention of the cunning and elusive Mafia Boss Joe Bonanno Sr., seventies of the original New York Families. Bonanno Sr. tries enticing Lou to sell, paying double his dealership's worth plus $100,000 salary, and bonus for each Cadillac dealership acquired to launder millions. Instead, Lou, having past intelligence skills, volunteers to help the FBI after meeting Special Agent Bob Anderson, mid thirties, serious and thorough. Lou insists on a legal separation for his family's protection. The FBI moves Lou into a two level undercover apartment complex. Agent Anderson in the apartment above and Lou directly below. Once both apartments are installed with elaborate surveillance the operation begins. For young Lori, her dad’s move is difficult. Unknowingly Lori suffers with Complex PTSD w/derealization from learning Old Testament excerpts so terrifying her brain vibrated keeping her from telling anyone fearing what she discovered is true- God is coming and soon Lori will have to choose; die with Everyone or stay on Earth, never to see her family again. While Lou’s undercover, knowing Lori's afraid of something, Bob arranges visits for Lou to spend with her. One visit watching Lori play softball, the only one to ever watch her play. Those visits were vital for Lori while also a respite for Lou. Lou had a knack for practical jokes, as Bob will soon experience more than once. For an important Bonanno meeting, Bob tells Lou he's going upstairs to check the equipment. As Bob checks the monitor, Lou walks around his apartment ‘naked’ in all his glory. Bob stomps on the floor from above, hearing Bob, he turns his backside towards the camera momentarily, then heads off to get dressed. Lou gained incredible evidence but not enough on Bonanno Sr. Headquarters announced shutting down the operation. Bob and Lou needed a tad longer. Headquarters is adamant, hitting Lou hard. His whole life is giving one-hundred percent. With Lou's continued absence, Lori's having episodes of feeling detached. Seeing the world as fake, a movie set. Lori dabbled from sex to drugs to escape. During Lori's freshman year of highschool was asked, under false pretenses, to come by her boyfriend's home and was overcome and raped by his brother. Two years later Lori's arrested. Furthering her downward spiral of low self-worth and daunting fear. Lou's last chance is a subpoena, a reason to reach out. Lou called Bonanno Sr. for advice after being served. During the call Sr. committed a felony. Extreme Elation had Bob and Lou jump and yell… “We got him!!!” “Finally got him!!” The Trial in 1979- Lou testified over four grueling days. In 1980 the Judge announced- “I find Joseph Bonanno Sr. GUILTY. Lou won the battle- not the war. After Lou moves back home, it's revealed he has terminal brain cancer. As treatments tire Lou, he'd ask Lori to lay with him until he fell asleep, just as Lou did for Lori when she needed him. They'd reminisce, chuckle, and Lou giving Lori life tips. Within one year of the guilty verdict, Lou died from a Glioblastoma brain tumor with Lori by his side. For years Lori struggled. One such moment was unbearable, not wanting to live- terrified to die. It was in that moment as if Lou cleared a path through all her grief and trauma to realize her purpose… Years later Lori placed a book on his grave- God, the Mafia, My Dad, and Me Written by Lori Lee Peters

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Is "persuaded" what you truly mean. It doesn't track. It connotes someone talks the daughter into believing she's going to die. "...learns of..."

What's the tie between dad and daughter. How does stopping the Mafioso affect the daughter. At some point, does Dad set out to keep her alive.

The first half is not bad.

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