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ABORT
By Karmin Mosley
Charlotte is a talented pediatric surgeon whose life takes a turn down a dark path due to a horrific incident that causes her to be infertile, which triggers her to conduct murderous experiments on young pregnant women to rehabilitate herself while a pill dependency, severe mental health issues, a broken marriage, and a job hang in the balance.
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Hi, Karmin Mosley. I think your logline has too many details. I suggest structuring this logline like the "A Tear In The Aorta" logline if you can. And here's a logline template that might help:
“After/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality and the protagonist's position/role) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/participates/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story, and try to add the obstacles here) so/in order to ________ (stakes).”
The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline: “A _______ (an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality and the protagonist's position/role) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/participates/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story, and try to add the obstacles here) so/in order to ________ (stakes) after/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion).”
And Christopher Lockhart has a great webinar on loglines. It’s called “How To Make Your Logline Attractive to A-List Actors, Producers, Directors, Managers, Agents, Financiers and Development Execs” (www.stage32.com/webinars/How-To-Make-Your-Logline-Attractive-to-A-List-A...).
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Hey Karmin, just looked at your logline. Girl.... that plot is crazy!! polish it up a bit and I think you have a winner boo. :-)
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