Sounds like a compelling coming of age story

Sounds like an interesting story, Eliot Galán.

I think your logline needs more details, like the story goal and the stakes. I suggest removing "and that's the good news." It's vague, which can make producers, directors, etc. pass on the script.

Here’s a logline template that might help:

“After/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (the main flaw that the main character has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the main character’s personality) _______ (the main character’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes).”

The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline: “A _______ (the main flaw that the main character has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the main character’s personality) _______ (the main character’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes) after/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion).”

And Christopher Lockhart has a great webinar on loglines. It’s called “How To Make Your Logline Attractive to A-List Actors, Producers, Directors, Managers, Agents, Financiers and Development Execs” (www.stage32.com/webinars/How-To-Make-Your-Logline-Attractive-to-A-List-A...).

You did a nice job summarizing your script in the synopsis, Eliot Galán, but I think it needs some work.

“Sol lives in Austin, Texas with his mother Alicia, who is expecting, and about to turn their lives upside down.” I think the bold part of that sentence needs to be structured better. Also, maybe give Sol and Alicia an adjective (one or two) that describes their personalities.

I suggest moving “It’s the mid-90s” to somewhere in the first paragraph.

I suggest using the third paragraph to tell more about what happens between Sol and his dad (the struggles in their relationship and their bonding moments).

Add a fourth paragraph that tells about the events leading up to the end of the script. And the end (“The hood will never be the same”) is vague. I suggest giving away the ending so producers, directors, etc. don’t pass on the script.

There’s a bull on the poster, but the picture doesn’t match the story. I suggest using a picture of a dad and his son, a picture of a hood in Cuernavaca, etc.

Maurice Vaughan thanks so much for the detailed feedback! Gives me much to think about.

You're welcome, Eliot Galán.