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THE TOKYO EXPRESS
By Jason Sacchi
Jefferson DeBlanc, a Marine Corps Fighter Pilot, is under attack by the Japanese Oscar fighters while escorting SBD Dauntless dive-bombers to sink the Japanese supply ships before reaching Guadalcanal.
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Marine Second Lieutenant Jefferson DeBlanc escorts 12 American dive-bombers to cut off the Japanese supply ships at Guadalcanal, but the Japanese Ki-43 Oscar fighters pursue him before heading back to Henderson Field.
THE TOKYO EXPRESS
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Jason Sacchi WHO is Jefferson DeBlanc? WHAT Japanese fighters? WHAT is an SBD? WHEN does this take place? For example: During WWII US Navy commander Jefferson DeBlanc is facing tremendous air pressure from a squadron of Japanese kamikaze pilots while he provides cover for The Douglass SBD Dauntless squadron he is tasked with protecting. The naval scout planes may be the only hope to neutralize a fleet of Japanese supply ships before they reach Guadalcanal.
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The logline could be better. Mike Childress suggested. It leaves out a lot of information.
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Jason Sacchi Start with a one-word description of your protagonist followed by an inciting incident. Then describe what the goal of the protagonist is and what the stakes are. Use Mike Childress example in his last line.
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Jefferson DeBlanc is the Marine Corps Pilot at Guadalcanal who got attacked by Japanese Oscar Fighters. Also, SBD Dauntless is a dive-bomber during the Pacific War and this episode takes place on January 31, 1943.
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