Susan Kelejian I would watch this. Only things I am wondering more about initially are the "underground group of five women" and the .traffickers

Mike Childress be more specific? Like should I say "a vigilante group of women" ? and Cartel traffickers? DM if you think of something?

Thanks all, I'm pushing this script out in a few weeks and the feedback is appreciated!

This sounds interesting, Susan Kelejian! I think "a vigilante group of women" or "a vigilante group of female bikers" would work better. And I think "to save her before she disappears forever" would work better than "aiming to save her before she disappears forever."

Maurice Vaughan agreed. TY :)

You're welcome, Susan Kelejian.

Tasha Lewis I see that you consistently rate my loglines low. I would like to know specifically why. It's not about preference of films, it's about the actual craft of writing a logline. So please share your educated opinions and your experience. It' just not kind or helpful to keep doing that without an explanation or offer any advice.

I reread all of your comments before responding. When someone who takes the time to rate and/or provide valuable feedback, I appreciate it. My advice was to review the ratings and respond. Based on your responses, you didn’t see the need to review them again so I did on your behalf. The ratings were 3-5 stars. If you would prefer going forward that I refrain from rating your work that’s fine. I try to help members achieve the types of deals that I have. But if you aren’t interested in being helped by me, I’m, Professor of over 30 years, 27 film projects and author of countless publications, okay with that. Best of luck!