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ELKROD'S FOREST
By Todd Fabyanic
When the new King begins his tyrannical dictatorship, Elkrod must lead the outcast of the forest in one last epic stand for freedom and safety.
SYNOPSIS:
Elkrod's Forest is a medieval fantasy-fiction story about poor oppressed people outcasted from their homes who follow an elder woodsman name Elkrod and settle in the forest. Once again, they are pursued by the king and his guard called the Kingsmen, who want to finish them off once and for all, but when Elkrod leads the men in the forest to defend their new home, an unexpected final battle creates an amazing epic stand off. Will the people of the forest stand their ground and defend their homes against tyranny?
FUN FACT: Elkrod’s Forest [Original concept] was a prequel story to the free public domain story Robin Hood. I’m sure we're all familiar with the concept of Sherwood Forest, and the type of characters that dwell in the realm. Misfits and outcasts are forced to live outside of the kingdom. In Robin Hood, these people were led to rebel and rise above tyranny. In theory: Elkrod’s Forest takes place before such an uprising, and is the story of how those people came to live in the forest. In the 90's Kevin Costner's movie: When Robin first went into Sherwood Forest, he was confronted by superstitious spooks and tricks by the forest occupants pretending to be spirits (to spook away unwanted guests). This is the very concept of Elkrod’s Forest.
Elkrod's Forest was created as part of a Transmedia Project for creative writing. The project was successful (Meeting the necessary requirements). If any producer is interested in filming or producing this script, Please contact me. Here is a link to the [BETA] Transmedia Web-page: https://mtrf14.wixsite.com/elkrodsforest
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ELKROD'S FOREST sounds interesting, Todd Fabyanic. Your logline is more of a pitch, and it's really long (90 words).
Here’s a logline template that might help: After/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (the main flaw that the protagonist has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality) _______ (the protagonist’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes).
The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline: A _______ (the main flaw that the protagonist has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality) _______ (the protagonist’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes) after/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion).
Loglines are one or two sentences. A one-sentence logline sounds better, and it takes less time for a producer, director, etc. to read it. Try to keep your logline to 35 words or less.
Avoid using “must” in loglines. “Must” usually means the protagonist is forced to do whatever they need to do in the story instead of doing it willingly. You might need to use “must” in a logline though, like when the protagonist is forced by another character to do something.
Names in loglines are usually for biopics, well-known stories, and franchises (like Mission: Impossible).
Sometimes I put the location and date that the story takes place in instead of the inciting incident if it’s a Period Piece script.
Maurice Vaughan I took your advice and shortened the logline. Thanks for the advice.