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"During the Nazi occupation of Poland, a resistance fighter is torn from her family and
sent to a concentration camp. Meanwhile, a young German officer, raised under the
Reich’s ideology, begins to question everything he believed. As their paths collide in a
brutal war, both must decide whether to fight for survival—or for something greater."
SYNOPSIS:
"Rest In War is a gripping historical drama set in the darkest days of World War II,
exploring the blurred lines between morality, survival, and human transformation. At its
core, it follows a Polish resistance fighter, Lena Kowalski, who is torn from her family
and sent to Auschwitz. There, she crosses paths with Thomas Schauren, a young Nazi
officer raised under the Reich’s ideology, who slowly begins to question everything he
was taught.
As war consumes everything around them, both are faced with impossible choices: to
betray their beliefs, to fight for survival, or to surrender to the ghosts of their past. In a
world where humanity is stripped away, can love exist? And if it does… what price
must be paid?"
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Hi Amanda,
Two things:
(1) Cut the scene numbers in your screenplay, that's only for production screenplays, not specs.
(2) When a sentence cuts off, the 'white margin' in between is too big; like this, your whole screenplay becomes a blur. Check your margins in your screenwriting sofwarre and readjust.
Best, Rutger
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Rutger Oosterhoff Hi Rutger,
Thank you so much for your thoughtful feedback. I truly appreciate it!
I wasn’t aware of the scene numbers being an issue in spec scripts, but I’ll make sure to remove them moving forward. Also, I’ll double-check the formatting and margins to make the script easier to read.
Your advice means a lot, thank you again for taking the time!
Best,
Amanda.
Hi Tasha Lewis
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and rate my logline.
I really appreciate it!
All the best,
Amanda.
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Can't wait to see this Amanda Alencar.
Leonardo Ramirez Thank you so much Leonardo for taking the time to read and rate my logline.
I'm so glad you liked it.
I have to confess, it's a dream of mine to one day see this project come alive on screen.
All the best,
Amanda.