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At a village fair, kids strike odd matches and a chalk-drawn door suddenly swings open—spilling Tokyo subway commuters into the crowd, all convinced they’ve found “just another new exit.”
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A noisy rural fair. Vendors yell prices while an old parrot mindlessly repeats market ads. Behind a shed, boys light tiny firecrackers with a box of odd black-glow matches. The last, damp match finally catches—and a chalk-drawn door on the wall shivers.
Click. It swings open from the other side. A stream of Tokyo subway commuters spills out, blinking—then behaving as if nothing is strange: buying apples and cotton candy, asking for vending machines, grumbling about “yet another new exit with no signage.”
The crowd freezes, then bursts into laughter and applause. A boy shouts, “Mom, we have a subway now!” The door slowly shuts by itself, leaving only chalk dust. The parrot drones: “Next stop—your wallet,” and returns to its ads. The world has shifted by a hair, but life rolls on as if it always had.
Keywords: contained, one location, chalk door, wet match, old parrot, village fair, portal gag, fish-out-of-water, micro-budget, low VFX
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Unique concept, Nataly Kiut! I think your logline needs some more info. Right now, it's just the setup. I suggest adding the goal and stakes.
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Maurice, Marcos, Tasha, Julien — thank you so much for your ratings and feedback!
Tasha, special thanks for your honest score — it means a lot that you actually read the logline instead of just ticking a box. Any feedback helps me grow, and I truly value it
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