THE STAGE 32 LOGLINES
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WHEREVER WE GO
By Jane Schnitter
When Jack and Joanne think they need more family time to create memories, they decide to try camping, but it's not as easy as it seems.
SYNOPSIS:
When Jack Howser decides his family needs something to reconnect, he turns to camping to bring them all closer even though he has never spent a single night in a tent. After buying all the equipment, he and his wife and their four children start spending weekends camping, trying to create new memories. Each weekend ends in a disaster, but also brings them closer to their ultimate goal of camping as a family. By the end of the summer, they never get to reach their goal when a freak thunder storm destroys their campsite. The parents are devastated that they have failed, but then they hear the children rehashing all the disasters. They realize that, although they weren't the memories they were searching for, the family has come closer together after all.
WHEREVER WE GO
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Jane I have a bit of constructive feedback on your Logline. It is an "art" of screenwriting I myself am trying to refine. I hope you take my criticism as just a useful suggestion. Here is perhaps a better or different way to convey your Logline. "Jack and Joanne think they need more family time to create memories. To create some new, meaningful and wonderful memories they decide to go camping. Creating such memories turns out to be not quite as easy as the idea seemed." Again just a suggestion and good luck with any endeavors.
Thanks for the idea. The problem I see is that I have always been told a logline should only be one, maybe two sentences at most.