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HEIR TO THE THRONE
By John E. Bias
In the wake of their father's demise, two princes - one a formidable wizard, the other a seasoned general, engage in a fierce battle for the throne, their clash threatening to tear the kingdom apart.
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Sounds interesting, John E. Bias.
I think the logline needs a little work.
Something like: "After the death of their father, two princes—one a powerful wizard, the other a general—fight/battle for control of the kingdom."
I removed "the king" because we know their father is a king because you put "princes."
"Fight/battle for" might not line up with your story, but I think you need something more attractive than "must decide."
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