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THE LAST DAY

THE LAST DAY
By Ritchie Johnston

GENRE: Thriller / Suspense, Horror
LOGLINE:

When a black-ops crew is sent to extract a biotech asset from an abandoned military facility, they uncover a vault full of classified horrors. As the mission unravels and something monstrous escapes, one ex-con fights to survive—only to learn he’s been part of a secret government operation the whole time.

SYNOPSIS:

Bray Graves just got out of prison with nothing but a cardboard box and a battered photo of the daughter he hasn’t seen in years. Enter Colt — ex-military, all smirk and menace — offering one last job: infiltrate a forgotten military facility and steal a biotech asset known only as “Item 68.”

Bray, Colt, and a mute killer named Marcus head to the decaying village above the site. But what starts as a black-ops heist quickly unravels into something else. The facility is still active. The “asset” is alive. And someone — maybe everyone — is lying.

Inside the vault lies the legacy of a Cold War experiment, a missing girl, and something not fully human. As the crew turns on each other and a secret organization called Black Circle closes in, Bray must choose between survival, vengeance, and the one chance he has to see his daughter again.

This isn’t just another job. It’s the last one any of them will take.

Written in 2013, Released in 2018, by P.O.M.M Films.

Revised and re-written in 2025!

Novel also available on Amazon: https://www.amazon.co.uk/dp/B0...

P.O.C available here:

THE LAST DAY

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Marcos Fizzotti

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Maurice Vaughan

Your logline is solid up until "but are they ready for the real secrets inside," Ritchie Johnston. I think that part is vague.

Ritchie Johnston

Thank you for checking this one out it's one of my earliest pieces which ended up being made as a no budget indie piece. It's actually available on youtube

Maurice Vaughan

You're welcome, Ritchie Johnston. Ok, cool. Scratch my feedback then. I thought you were pitching this project.

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Ashley Renee Smith

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Ashley Renee Smith

Ritchie Johnston The phrase “uncovers more than they were paid to steal” effectively teases a twist without giving too much away, keeping the intrigue high. To elevate it further, you might consider specifying the nature of what’s discovered: Is it dangerous tech? A government secret? A moral dilemma? A touch more detail would help this feel more distinctive and increase the stakes. But overall, it’s a clean, compelling logline.

Ritchie Johnston

Thanks Ashley :). I've been reworking this one, I will barely that in mind. :D

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