Hello All! I'm wondering if anyone would want to give me some input on my logline for my Thiiller feature screenplay. I'm not sure if it's good, bad or okay? Thank you in advance! Logline: After becoming stranded in a treacherous snow storm, a woman must face the demons from her past to save her family from the ruthless man hunting them.
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Shooting yourself in the foot is quick. Writing loglines is more like amputating your own toe with a pair of manicuring scissors.
Ha!! True! :-)
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I think the issue with your log line is vagueness. You want to give just enough details to make us want more but not giving away too much. You must give us three things in your log line; the main char...
Expand commentI think the issue with your log line is vagueness. You want to give just enough details to make us want more but not giving away too much. You must give us three things in your log line; the main character and their want, the main villain and their want, and what makes it unique. woman facing past demons (What demons?) ruthless man (What is his want?) snow storm (Good) Tweak each one of these with a bit more details will make it better.
Thank you Bill! Great advise!
I agree, your logline is a little vague, but has promise!