You don't need the comma after "hit man lover. The last phrase seems vague. Do they actually play a game of poker? If so, what are the stakes? Strip poker? High stakes poker?

Hey @Brian MANY THANKS. I meant they are all playing poker psychologically, with each other, but as you just made me realise not a lot of people may be on my wavelength. I get your point! I just changed it, new logline a bit simple for my liking but no one should miss the point. The comma! Yikes! Don't know how that got in, but I been on a roll working long hours, so starting to make little mistakes. Have a great weekend!

What if the wealthy tourist tries to hire the vixen and her hit man lover after that tourist is kidnapped? It's that "changes their end game" that needs some more illumination to give it precise heat. Still a bit vague...

@Stephen Thanks for touching base about the service, we live in a revolution of binge viewing and streaming and it would be foolish not to take advantage. LALA land sounds just like what I need! Will keep you posted. I'm a film writer but looking into pilot/tv/web n live stream etc.

@Brian Hey many thanks for being the first in line of defence again, regards these dead wood loglines I been firing out but my Brains Are Fried now, due to working long hours and averaging four hours sleep. So, I'm resting for a couple of days, but next week will fire you off another three or so possible loglines. CHEERS GUYS! "I'LL BE BACK."