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FINAL RUN (FEATURE VERSION)
By Ken Foley
"Moon" meets "John Wick."
In the future, an interstellar mercenary plans to leave the hard life behind after one last job. But when he discovers his cargo is not what it seems, he is forced to take drastic measures. Relentlessly pursued by both sides of the law, he finds himself ensnared in a deadly gambit for not only his survival, but humanity’s.
SYNOPSIS:
A full length feature based on my short, FINAL RUN.
Synopsis coming soon.
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I'd have to read the screenplay before I could give it a higher rating. Sounds interesting!
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You may want to trim down the Log Line a little bit. Maybe even by 1/2 if possible. I know that can be hard...trust me, I really do. But in the long run it's worth it. Rewrite it using a lot less wordage. Look at Netflix for Great Examples of Log Lines!!! They have just about the best! I still want to read the screenplay wgunn1953@hotmail.com
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This logline is very good, in fact one of the better ones I've read here. It is a little long, but that's okay, it's not a 'marketing logline' which is different. It does have the main parts: Protagonist, Goal, Antagonist/s. The Death Stakes need to be more clearly defined.
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It seems to me that you need to uncover in the logline what kind of cargo in order to understand the danger for the main character and for the inhabitants of the earth.
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