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When a gifted Russian girl goes to work in a small New York modeling agency, she faces the mafia and gets in the middle of a struggle for power among criminal authorities.
SYNOPSIS:
To earn money for admission to a prestigious American university, a gifted Russian girl comes to work in a small New York modeling agency. But in a foreign country, the heroine faces the mafia, which uses her beauty, intelligence and new connections to obtain insider information for fraud on the stock exchange and finds herself in the center of the struggle for power of criminal authorities.
The series tells about two heroes, a guy named Max and a girl named Anastasia, who live and work in New York. They have different goals in life and different enemies, but they are united by love for each other. The guy is confused in the affairs of the Russian mafia and is trying to get out of problems. The girl, on the contrary, following her dream, plunges into the world of crime.
Anastasia has several enemies – this is the director of the modeling agency Natalia. And Alexey is a nightclub owner who decided to use the heroine for his own purposes in the war for leadership in the mafia.
Max is an antagonist for himself, the criminal environment and friends lead him to death, but love for the heroine is his salvation. For her sake, he is ready to change.
The stories of the two heroes alternate with each other, allowing viewers to observe events from the life of the modeling business and the criminal world. The beauty and chic of models and models will alternate with dangerous neighborhoods and violent crimes.
The series will have a developed horizontal plot. Each of the heroes moves towards his goal, gaining friends and enemies, making mistakes or brave deeds.
In the course of history, Anastasia will almost completely replace her former friends with a criminal society, will extract insider information, will become a fraudster, as well as an informer to the FBI. And then she will find himself in the center of a war of mafia groups.
Max's attempt to end his criminal past will end in failure. He will return to illegal business, and during the war of mafia groups he will have to defend not only himself, but also Anastasia.
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Hey Arthur, it's a nice concept. Here's a suggestion to make the logline shorter: "When a gifted Russian girl comes to work in a small New York modeling agency, she faces the mafia and falls in the center of a struggle for power of criminal authorities." Further details can go in the synopsis.
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This is an ideal option. Thank you very much, Marcos Fizzotti!
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Matthew Parvin, thank you for the high rating!
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Arthur Charpentier I like Marcos' logline. I just think having "of" twice makes the second part of the logline sound off.
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Good one, Maurice. Perhaps replace the last 'of' by 'among', as in, "she faces the mafia and gets into the center of a struggle for power among criminal authorities."
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I like "among," Marcos Fizzotti. I changed "gets into the center of" to "gets in the middle of."
"When a gifted Russian girl goes to work in a small New York modeling agency, she faces the mafia and gets in the middle of a struggle for power among criminal authorities."
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Claude Gagne, Thank you for your high rating and feedback!
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Tasha Lewis, thank you for the high rating!
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Nate Rymer, thank you for the high rating!
I have a question, Arthur Charpentier. Does she face the mafia as in fight it?
Maurice Vaughan, Thank you very much for your help. I like both versions of the logline, but since you both have reached an agreement, I will use your final version.
Maurice Vaughan, Yes, the heroine will try to hand over to the police or the FBI two mafia members who were her enemies. But the police will need the main boss, whom she will not want to hand over, because they have a good relationship.
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Marcos Fizzotti, thank you for the high rating!
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Roberta M Roy, thank you for the high rating!
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