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GHOSTS OF THE MOUNTAINS
By Arthur Charpentier
An enthusiastic historian goes to the mountains in search of Genghis Khan's treasures. However, to get to the gold, the hero will have to fight with the Yeti.
SYNOPSIS:
The main character is looking for the treasure of Genghis Khan, he finds a map, goes to Altai and there the Yeti, the personification of the mountain spirit who guards Shambhala and treasures, gets in his way. The hero kills the Yeti, finds his cave and penetrates through it into Shambhala. But instead of treasures, he discovers the tomb of Genghis Khan, whose spirit moves in the hero, and he returns to the world to revive the empire and conquer the whole Earth.
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It looks like the online translator distorted the meaning of the text in the final. The site shows a different text when translated back. Corrected the word, perhaps it will be more accurate.
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Claude Gagne, Thank you so much for the high rating!
I had a desire to call the project "Gold and the Yeti", but this name is more suitable for a comedy plot.
Your title for the film is very good, you can come up with a new story for it. In Altai mythology, there are evil gnomes who live in the mountains and mine gold. Yeti somehow got hold of the gold of the dwarves and keeps it in his cave. And the heroes, inspired by the legend of the treasure, go in search of gold, but they meet an yeti.
Tasha Lewis, Thank you so much for the high rating!
Julio Caro, Thank you so much for the high rating!
Marcos Fizzotti, Thank you so much for the high rating!
Nate Rymer, Thank you so much for the high rating!
Zachariah Rosalie, Thank you so much for the high rating!
Lalit Sabherwal, please tell us what flaws you see in this idea.
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Historians care about history, not gold.
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@Rose Scott
Indiana Jones and Tomb Rider?
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The ‘historian’ in this context is a secondary characteristic. By saying “the historian’ in your logline, you make his career a primary, defining characteristic. The action and/or dilemma of the historian should follow what one would expect of a historian. However, your main character seems to be a treasure hunter - who happens to be a historian. If you removed the word historian from your logline, and replaced it with ‘man’ or ‘woman’ it wouldn’t be missed. That is your test.
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@Rose Scott
understood. I translate texts using an online translator in the browser. and in this case, there is an inaccurate translation. The historian is not the profession of the main character, it is his hobby. in the logline, the historian describes the character of the main character, not the profession.
I have a friend who is passionate about the history of ancient Rome. By the way, he went to Italy to visit historical sites.
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You are writing stories that are action filled as opposed to emotionally charged. I encourage you to have fun with your loglines. Paint a picture of the roller coaster journey you will take your audiences on.