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KNITTING OUT
By Catarina De Cèzanne
When being rejected after losing her virginity, a socially awkward but talented weaver descends into obsession and becomes famous by knitting parts of her ex-boyfriends in her tapestries.
(updated January 23, 2023)
SYNOPSIS:
Tullah (Talullah) is a lonely young woman with polycoria (a big doubled iris in the same eye) who grew up with a socially awkward mother, ABIGAIL, spending her day's learning to knit and turning tapestries into Art. After Abigail's death, Tullah starts going out with JOHN, a long-haired heavy metal with whom she instantaneously falls in love. When losing her virginity with John, Tullah's obsession increases leading to the drastic end of the relationship, unleashing an ancient family curse that awakes paranormal forces that shape her life forever, threaten everybody around her.
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Thank you for rating this logline, Alice Carter. Please be so kind to add some notes in the comments to help to improve it.
Not sure how the title is related to the story - so, it could benefit from improvement. "Evil Eye" would match better but that's been used a lot per IMDB. Logline should generally be: who, what, and rising stakes. The beginning of the story is a woman with a congenital problem that falls for the wrong guy and something happens... It doesn't indicate if that something is a problem or not. The ancient family curse might be a good thing to protect her from her bad love affair or it could be a bad curse where she has to fight for her life... We need a better since of that in the logline so we can "see" the story in our heads - pun intended.
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Thank you so much Rebecca Jean-Carroll!
Thank you @Christopher for that amazing feedback, I've changed it.
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