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RUBE'S MISTAKE
By Paul Abramson

GENRE: Comedy
LOGLINE:


A gas station attendant, a filmmaker wannabe, and a computer nerd accept a proposal from the gas station owner's sultry wife - kill her husband for a share of her inheritance.  The three idiots concoct an elaborate machine to complete the deed, only to have their misguided attempts foiled by unwitting customers.  The station is trashed, the owner and his wife collect on the insurance policy, and the friends are left with nothing but a camcorder with no tape.

SYNOPSIS:

Three middle-aged, socially challenged friends accept a proposal by the beautiful wife of the wealthy owner of the town’s only gas station. If they kill her husband in a manner which leaves no damning evidence, she will give them a portion of her inheritance.

The trio devises a machine (a "Rube Goldberg") that triggers a comical chain of actions intended to result in the victim's accidental death the minute he enters the gas station convenient store. The whole thing will be immortalized on tape. The machine is constantly sabotaged unknowingly by customers being in the wrong place at the right time.

The station is trashed beyond repair, the owner and his wife collect the insurance and the would-be assassins are left with nothing but a camcorder with no tape.

Wile E. Coyote meets The Three Stooges.

Marcos Fizzotti

Hey Paul! Your story does sound great, but the logline is a bit too long. Here's a suggestion: "When a gas station attendant, a filmmaker wannabe, and a computer nerd accept a proposal from the gas station owner's sultry wife - kill her husband for a share of her inheritance, they now have to face unwitting customers trying to foil their plans." All other details can be put in the synopsis.

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