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FORMAT: Feature | Comedy / Rom-Com | Young Adult – Coming of Age – Family-Friendly
LOGLINE: After convincing his fiancé to elope to Vegas, a would-be groom gets more than he bargained for as he’s forced to deal with meddling in-laws and his bride’s obsession with Peter Pan and Tinkerbelle.
COMPS: MEET THE FOCKERS meets AMERICAN WEDDING
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I think the story sounds like it could be extremely entertaining! My $0.02 on the logline however: A> Is it a groom-to-be or a would-be groom? B> "What else could possibly go wrong?" - the real estate is so valuable in the logline that it could be used to deliver more about the story than asking a rhetorical question. C> Same with "and worse yet".... let the reader be the judge. Again, my $0.02. May your journey with this be a success!