Hi there, Drew! This sounds like this could be just lovely, however, we're not as clear on what happens in the piece as we could be.
Consider your logline to be the shortest possible synopsis of your entire piece (2 sentences max). Within that synopsis, we want to clearly cite who (really "WHAT") the protagonist is, the inciting incident, the obstacle(s) and the stakes.
For example:
"A wheelchair-bound photographer spies on his neighbors from his apartment window and becomes convinced one of them has committed murder."
Hi there, Drew! This sounds like this could be just lovely, however, we're not as clear on what happens in the piece as we could be.
Consider your logline to be the shortest possible synopsis of your entire piece (2 sentences max). Within that synopsis, we want to clearly cite who (really "WHAT") the protagonist is, the inciting incident, the obstacle(s) and the stakes.
For example:
"A wheelchair-bound photographer spies on his neighbors from his apartment window and becomes convinced one of them has committed murder."
I hope that this is a helpful start!
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