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Fishywood. A greedy Dolphin Shrink has second thoughts when--after Great White Padrino offers him a million clams to manipulate a depressed Loan Shark into committing suicide--he develops a friendship with his patient.
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Feading all the info of the old (2016) logline into ChattGPT it came up with: "In 'Analyze Fish,' a greedy Dolphin Shrink initially agrees to manipulate a depressed Loan Shark into committing suicide for a million clams offered by the Great White Padrino, but has second thoughts when he develops an unexpected friendship with his patient, leading to a heartwarming journey of self-discovery and redemption amidst the perilous waters of their underwater world."
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Sounds like fun
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Thanks to all. Best wishes Rutger
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I love your logline. It's uncanny that your characters resemble some of mine. Do we think alike? In Alien Base 420, there is a large aquarium containing some of my alien characters. Star Blazer, a seductive starfish with a unique talent, Aunt Fibian, the matriarch of the aquarium. and the angry frog. My problem is fixing my logline and adapting the novel into a screenplay.
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Haha-that is so cool. For fixing your logline you could go to www.logline.it and post it there. Adapting the novel into a screenplay is tricky, I am not sure translating your screenplay one on one would do the trick. I could do it for you for free, but I'm not a good enough writer to make it work. What I did myself with three basic ideas is to let Jerel Damon write two of them, paid. The last one we wrote together. Jerel could do it, but I know there are at least two or three people as qualified as he is in your genre. His specialty is Comic Book style screenplays and crime, somewhat combined.
What I would do is make an account on www.scriptrevolution.com and check out some writers there.
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Thanks, Judith, I just established the party that orders the greedy dolphin shrink to do his bidding': Great White ‘Padrino’.
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Thanks Wilmer!
Thanks Grzegorz!
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Thanks Tasha!
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Thanks Nate!