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MARTIAN MYSTERY
By Mitch Bechtold
A detective is hired to investigate a robbery on the recently colonized Mars. However, once she arrives, she learns that every suspect has motive and a criminal past. Alone on the colony, she has no friends, no backup, and our hero must rely on her own wit and skill to solve the case and make it off the planet alive.
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Must have a friend.
I'm pretty sure she can make it off the planet on her own, but I think it would be better to lose that specific description by making the log line more succinct. This way she can meet people on planet, whom she isn't investigating and can maybe lean on later (if she needs to)